- •Structure and presentation
- •1.1.1 Sender's address
- •Inside (or receiver's) address
- •1 Surname known
- •2 Title known
- •3 Department known
- •4 Company only
- •Style and punctuation of addresses
- •Denmark
- •The body of the letter
- •Complimentary closes
- •Signatures
- •Letterheads
- •2 Board of Directors
- •3 Addresses
- •4 Registered number
- •References
- •Company position
- •Enclosures
- •Layout 3
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •2 Content and style
- •Too long
- •Too short
- •The right length
- •A warning
- •Order and sequence
- •Unclear sequence
- •Clear sequence
- •Planning your letter
- •Arrand, and latest designs
- •First paragraph
- •Middle paragraphs
- •Final paragraph
- •Style and language
- •Courtesy
- •Idioms and colloquial language
- •Clarity
- •Abbreviations
- •Figures
- •Prepositions
- •Accuracy
- •Titles, names, and addresses
- •References
- •Enclosures
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •2 Content and style
- •Too long
- •Too short
- •The right length
- •A warning
- •Order and sequence
- •Unclear sequence
- •Clear sequence
- •Planning your letter
- •Arrand, and latest designs
- •First paragraph
- •Middle paragraphs
- •Final paragraph
- •Style and language
- •Courtesy
- •Idioms and colloquial language
- •Clarity
- •Abbreviations
- •Figures
- •Prepositions
- •Accuracy
- •Titles, names, and addresses
- •References
- •Enclosures
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •3 Enquiries
- •Methods of enquiry
- •Writing letters of enquiry
- •Opening
- •Asking for catalogues, price-lists, prospectuses
- •Asking for details
- •Asking for samples, patterns, demonstrations
- •Suggesting terms, methods of payment, discounts
- •Asking for goods on approval or on sale or return
- •Asking for an estimate or tender
- •Closing
- •Specimen letters
- •Short enquiries
- •Disc sa
- •Reply to an advertisement
- •Enquiry from a buying agent
- •Enquiry from a retailer to a foreign manufacturer
- •Questions
- •Request for goods on approval
- •Questions
- •Jean Landman
- •Request for an estimate
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •4 Replies and quotations
- •Replying to letters of enquiry
- •Opening
- •Confirming that you can help
- •'Selling' your product
- •Suggesting alternatives
- •Referring the customer elsewhere
- •Catalogues, price-lists, prospectuses, samples
- •Demonstrations, representatives, showroom visits
- •Closing
- •Quotations
- •Transport and insurance costs
- •Discounts
- •Methods of payment
- •Quoting delivery
- •Fixed terms and negotiable terms
- •Giving an estimate
- •Specimen letters
- •R. G. Electronics ag
- •D&sCharcotS.A.R.L
- •Goods on approval
- •Questions
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •5 Orders
- •Placing an order
- •Opening
- •Payment
- •Discounts
- •Delivery
- •Methods of delivery
- •Acknowledging an order
- •Advice of despatch
- •Specimen letters and forms
- •Placing an order: covering letter
- •Questions
- •Attn. Mr d. Causio
- •Order form
- •Questions
- •Acknowledgement of order
- •Advice of despatch
- •Placing an order
- •Questions
- •Advice of despatch
- •Questions
- •Advice note
- •Delays in delivery
- •Refusing an order
- •Out of stock
- •Bad reputation
- •Unfavourable terms
- •Size of order
- •Panton Works, Hounslow, Middlesex, tw6 2bq
- •Questions
- •Refusing an order Questions
- •Sp Wholesalers plc
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •Invoices and statements
- •Invoices
- •International Giro
- •International Money Orders
- •International bankers draft
- •Invoice
- •6.3.2 Invoice
- •Ingenieros Industriales sa
- •6.6.7 Second request
- •Unjustified complaints
- •7.3.6 Closing
- •Specimen letters
- •E. F. Baden ag
- •7.6.2 Credit note
- •8 Credit
- •1 Reputation
- •2 Long-term trading association
- •3 References
- •8.4.2 Refusing credit
- •8.4.3 Negotiating
- •21 Mead Road, Swansea, Glamorgan 3st1dr
- •8.8.2 Referee's reply
- •Via di Pietra Papa, 00146 Roma
- •31 Goodge Street, London ec49 4ee
- •21 Mead Road, Swansea, Glamorgan 3st1dr
- •International banking
- •New zealand bank
- •Telephone: 448135/6/7/8
- •International crafts ltd.
- •Telephone: 081 834 2179, 081 834 2710 Cable: intercra Telex: 315620 Fax:081-8344431
- •Dock 23, Mainway, Hong Kong Telephone: 385162 Telex: 349512 Fax: 662553 Cable: lebats
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •10 Agents and agencies
- •Types of agencies
- •Brokers
- •Finding an agent
- •Offering an agency
- •Commission
- •Asking for an agency
- •British crystal Ltd
- •Al Manni Way, Riyadh
- •Directors: m. Allison, b. Locke
- •International Trading Co. Ltd.
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •11 Transportation and shipping
- •Road, rail, and air
- •Specimen letters
- •Air Waybill
- •Shipping
- •Specimen letters
- •Dock 23, Mainway, Hong Kong
- •Bill of lading
- •Instruction to a forwarding agent
- •South Bank House, Borough Road, London se1 oaa
- •International Shippers Ltd.
- •City House, City Road, London ec2 1 pc
- •South Bank House, Borough Road, London se1 oaa
- •President: j.R, Mason d.F.A. Directors: p. Hartley Snr., a. Hartley Jnr
- •618 West and Vine Street, Chicago, Illinois Telephone: 216818532 Telex: 677312 Fax: 216 349076
- •President: j.R, Mason d.F.A. Directors: p. Hartley Snr., a. Hartley Jnr
- •618 West and Vine Street, Chicago, Illinois Telephone: 216818532 Telex: 677312 Fax: 216 349076
- •South Bank House, Borough Road, London se1 oaa
- •Container services
- •International Shippers Ltd.
- •City House, City Road, London ec2 1 pc
- •Chartering ships
- •Chairman: b. Eltham Directors: d.E.R. Machin. O.M. Crewit Furnace House, Granville Road, Sheffield s2 2rl
- •Vat No: 31 4287160 Telex: 813297 unestg
- •International Containers Ltd. Chairman r.L Nathan acwa Directors t.N. Frost, l.S. Newcombe Buxton House, Mableton Place, London wc1h 9bh
- •Certificate of origin
- •Telephone: 071 742 8315 Telex: 331497 longra g Fax: 071 7423319
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •12 Insurance
- •Insurance procedures
- •Fire and accident insurance
- •Head Office, Bruce House, Bruce Street, Aberdeen ab9 1fr
- •Specimen letters
- •Head Office, Bruce House, Bruce Street, Aberdeen ab9 1fr
- •Marine insurance
- •South Bank House, Borough Road, London se1 oaa
- •Worldwide Insurance Ltd. 15 May 20—
- •Rejection of claim
- •Words to remember
- •13 Electronic correspondence
- •Fax transmission
- •Perfect Office Suppliers Limited Canal Street, Manchester m14 2kq Fax transmission
- •Specimen email message
- •Telegrams and cables
- •Abbreviations
- •Operating the telex
- •Instruction to stockbroker
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •Reservations
- •Appointments
- •Hospitality
- •Special occasions
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •15 In company communications
- •Memorandum
- •Visit of a customer
- •Visit of a customer
- •Retirement of Managing Director
- •Memorandum l Franksen plc Prince of Wales Road, Sheffield s9 4ex
- •Redundancies
- •Reports
- •Specimen reports
- •Memorandum
- •Finance
- •Conclusions
- •Agency report
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •Advertisements
- •Applying for a position
- •Curriculum vitae
- •Furstenweg 110
- •Specimen letters
- •Questions
- •Invitation for an interview
- •International Computing Services pic
- •Making a decision
- •Openings
- •Accepting a position
- •International Computing Services pic
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
- •Advertisements
- •Applying for a position
- •Curriculum vitae
- •Furstenweg 110
- •Specimen letters
- •Questions
- •Invitation for an interview
- •International Computing Services pic
- •Making a decision
- •Openings
- •Accepting a position
- •International Computing Services pic
- •Points to remember
- •Words to remember
Words to remember
length
order and sequence
style and language
clarity
simplicity
courtesy
accuracy
idioms
colloquial language
abbreviations
a statement
a sentence
a paragraph
to open a letter
to introduce oneself
to acknowledge an enquiry
to draw attention to something
to point out something
to make a point
to restate a point
to enclose a catalogue
to encourage further contact
to close a letter
2 Content and style
Length; order and sequence; planning your letter; style and language; clarity; accuracy.
This unit gives you some general ideas on how to write business letters: how much information to give, how to plan your letter, what sort of style to use, how to make your letters as clear, informative and accurate as possible. They are, however, only general ideas, your real appreciation of what to do and what not to do in commercial correspondence will only come as you read through and study the following units.
2.1
Length
Students often ask how long their letter should be. The answer is, as long as necessary, and this will depend on the subject of the letter; it may be a simple Subject, e.g. thanking a customer for a cheque, or quite complicated, e.g. explaining how a group insurance policy works. It is a question of how much information you put in the letter: you may give too little (even for a brief subject), in which case your letter will be too short, or too much (even for a complicated subject), in which case it will be too long. Your style and the kind of language you use can also affect the length (see 2.4). The right length includes the right amount of information.
The three letters that follow are written by different people in reply to the same enquiry from a Mr Arrand about the company's product.
2.1.1
Too long
There are a number of things wrong with a letter of this sort. Though it tries to advertise the products and the company itself, it is too wordy. There is no need to explain that stores or shops are stocking for Christmas; the customer is aware of this. Rather than draw attention to certain items the customer might be interested in, the letter only explains what the customer can already see, that there is a wide selection of watches in the catalogue covering the full range of market prices. In addition, the writer goes on unnecessarily to explain which countries the firm sells to, the history of the company, and its rather unimpressive motto.
Dear Mr Arrand,
Thank you very much for your enquiry of S November which we received today. We often receive enquiries from large stores and always welcome them, particularly at this time of the year when we know that you will be stocking for Christmas.
We have enclosed our winter catalogue and are sure you will be extremely impressed by the wide range of watches that we stock. You will see that they range from the traditional to the latest in quartz movements and include ranges for men, women, and children, with prices that should suit all your customers, from models costing only a few pounds to those in the upper-market bracket priced at several hundred pounds. But whether you buy a cheaper or more expensive model we guarantee all merchandise for two years with a full service.
Enclosed you will also find our price-list giving full details on c.i.f. prices to London and explaining our discounts which we think you will find very generous and which we hope you will take full advantage of.
We are always available to offer you further information about our products and can promise you personal attention whenever you require it. This service is given to all our customers throughout the world, and as you probably know, we deal with countries from the Far East to Europe and Latin America, and this fact alone bears out our reputation which has been established for more than a hundred years and has made our motto a household world - Time for Everyone.
Once again may we thank you for your enquiry and say that we look forward to hearing from you in the near future?
Yours sincerely,
2.1.2