- •Understanding Why Communication Matters
- •Communicating as a Professional
- •Exploring the Communication Process
- •Committing to Ethical Communication
- •Communicating in a World of Diversity
- •Using Technology to Improve Business Communication
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Understanding the Three-Step Writing Process
- •Analyzing the Situation
- •Gathering Information
- •Selecting the Right Medium
- •Organizing Your Message
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Adapting to Your Audience: Building Strong Relationships
- •Adapting to Your Audience: Controlling Your Style and Tone
- •Composing Your Message: Choosing Powerful Words
- •Composing Your Message: Creating Effective Sentences
- •Composing Your Message: Crafting Coherent Paragraphs
- •Using Technology to Compose and Shape Your Messages
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Revising Your Message: Evaluating the First Draft
- •Revising to Improve Readability
- •Editing for Clarity and Conciseness
- •Using Technology to Revise Your Message
- •Producing Your Message
- •Proofreading Your Message
- •Distributing Your Message
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Electronic Media for Business Communication
- •Social Networks
- •Information and Media Sharing Sites
- •Instant Messaging and Text Messaging
- •Blogging
- •Podcasting
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Strategy for Routine Requests
- •Common Examples of Routine Requests
- •Strategy for Routine Replies and Positive Messages
- •Common Examples of Routine Replies and Positive Messages
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Using the Three-Step Writing Process for Negative Messages
- •Using the Direct Approach for Negative Messages
- •Using the Indirect Approach for Negative Messages
- •Sending Negative Messages on Routine Business Matters
- •Sending Negative Employment Messages
- •Sending Negative Organizational News
- •Responding to Negative Information in a Social Media Environment
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Using the Three-Step Writing Process for Persuasive Messages
- •Developing Persuasive Business Messages
- •Common Examples of Persuasive Business Messages
- •Developing Marketing and Sales Messages
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Applying the Three-Step Writing Process to Reports and Proposals
- •Supporting Your Messages with Reliable Information
- •Conducting Secondary Research
- •Conducting Primary Research
- •Planning Informational Reports
- •Planning Analytical Reports
- •Planning Proposals
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Writing Reports and Proposals
- •Writing for Websites and Wikis
- •Illustrating Your Reports with Effective Visuals
- •Completing Reports and Proposals
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Finding the Ideal Opportunity in Today’s Job Market
- •Planning Your Résumé
- •Writing Your Résumé
- •Completing Your Résumé
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Submitting Your Résumé
- •Understanding the Interviewing Process
- •Preparing for a Job Interview
- •Interviewing for Success
- •Following Up After an Interview
- •Chapter Review and Activities
- •Test Your Knowledge
- •Apply Your Knowledge
- •Practice Your Skills
- •Expand Your Skills
- •References
- •Index
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TO: all.employees
SUBJECT: Health insurance—Changes
Unlike many companies, Bright Manufacturing has always paid a hundred % of medical car insurance for it’s employees, absorbing the recent 10–20 percent annual cost increases in order to provide this important benefit. This year; Blue Cross gave us some terrible news: the cost increase for our employee’s medical coverage would be a staggering fourty percent per month next year
To mange the increase and continue to offer you and your family highquality medical coverage we have negotiated several changes with Blue Cross; a new cost saving alternative is also being offered by us:
Under the Blue Cross Plus plan, copay amounts for office visits will be ten dollars next year/ $50 for emergency room visits.
80 % of employees’ insurance coverage (including 10 percent of the cost increase) will be paid by Bright next year and 100 % of the prescription drug costs (including a 23 percent cost increase). The
remaining twenty percent of medical coverage will be deducted by us monthly from your salary, if you choose to remain on a Blue Cross Plus plan. We realize this is alot, but its still less than many companies charge their employees.
A fully paid alternative health plan, Blue Cross HMO, will now be provided by Bright at no cost to employees. But be warned that there is a deadline. If you want to switch to this new plan you must do so during our open enrollment period, Nov. 20 to December 1, and we will not consder applications for the change after that time so don’t get your forms in late.
There are forms available in the Human Resources office for changing your coverage. They must be returned between November 20 and December 1. If you wish to remain on a Blue Cross Plus policy, you do not need to notify us; payroll deductions for company employees on the plan will occur automatic beginning January first.
If you have questions, please call our new Medical Benefits Information line at ext. 3392. Our Intranet sight will also provide you easy with information about health care coverage online if you click the “Medical Benefits” icon. Since our founding in 1946, we have provided our company employees with the best medical coverage available. We all hate rising costs and although things are looking bleak for the future but we’re doing all we can do to hold on to this helpful benefit for you.
Lucinda Goodman, Benefits Mangr., Human resources
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Adrienne Carter and Amy Borrus, “What If Companies Fessed Up?” BusinessWeek, 24 January 2005, 59–60; Patrick J. Kiger, “The Art of the Apology,” Workforce Management, October 2004, 57–62.
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Writing Persuasive Messages
LEARNING OBJECTIVES
After studying this chapter, you will be able to
1Apply the three-step writing process to persuasive messages.
2Describe an effective strategy for developing persuasive business messages.
3Identify the three most common categories of persuasive business messages.
4Describe an effective strategy for developing marketing and sales messages, explain how to modify this approach for social media, and identify steps you can take to avoid ethical lapses in marketing and sales messages.
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—Sonia Simone, cofounder and chief marketing officer of Copyblogger Media
Sonia Simone emphasizes the power of trust in persuasive communication; without it, you’ll have a hard time convincing people to change their beliefs or behaviors.
Sonia Simone
Sonia Simone was discussing the fear that keeps online shoppers from completing a transaction, but her insight applies to every form of persuasive communication.1 Whether you’re trying to convince people to help fund your new business via Kickstarter, asking your boss for a raise, or promoting a concert, trust is an essential element of persuasion. If people don’t believe in you, they won’t believe in what you’re promoting.
In this chapter, you’ll apply what you’ve learned so far about writing to the unique challenges of persuasive messages. You’ll explore two types of persuasive messages: persuasive business messages (those that try to convince audiences to approve new projects, enter into business partnerships, and so on) and marketing and sales messages (those that try to convince audiences to consider and then purchase products and services).
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Using the Three-Step Writing Process for Persuasive Messages
Whether you’re convincing your boss to open a new office in Europe or encouraging potential customers to try your products, you’ll use many of the same techniques of persuasion— the attempt to change an audience’s attitudes, beliefs, or actions.2 Because persuasive messages ask audiences to give something of value (money in exchange for a product, for example) or take substantial action (such as changing a corporate policy), they are more challenging to write than routine messages. Successful professionals understand that persuasion is not about trickery or getting people to act against their own best interests; it’s about letting audiences know they have choices and presenting your offering in the best possible light.3
1 LEARNING OBJECTIVE
Apply the three-step writing process to persuasive messages.
Persuasion is the attempt to change someone’s attitudes, beliefs, or actions.
Step 1: Planning Persuasive Messages
In today’s information-saturated business environment, having a great idea or a great product is no longer enough. Every day, untold numbers of good ideas go unnoticed and good products go unsold simply because the messages meant to promote them aren’t compelling enough to be heard above the competitive noise. Creating successful persuasive messages in these challenging situations demands careful attention to all four tasks in the planning step, starting with an insightful analysis of your purpose and your audience.
Analyzing the Situation
In defining your purpose, make sure you’re clear about what you really hope to achieve. Suppose you want to persuade company executives to support a particular research project. But what does “support” mean? Do you want them to pat you on the back and wish you well? Or do you want them to give you a staff of five researchers and a $1 million annual budget?
The best persuasive messages are closely connected to your audience’s desires and interests (see Figure 9.1).4 Consider these important questions: Who is my audience? What are my audience members’ needs? What do I want them to do? How might they resist? Are there alternative positions I need to examine? What does the decision maker consider to be the most important issue? How might the organization’s culture influence my strategy?
Having a great idea or a great product is not enough; you need to be able to convince others of its merits.
Clarifying your purpose is an essential step with persuasive messages.
The main idea of “choose TD Ameritrade” is
echoed from the webpage tab, through the introductory text, and down to the specific details.
The headline and introductory paragraph
address universal concerns among investors.
These six supporting points—each of which reflects a key audience need—back up the top-level message of “A better way to invest.”
Figure 9.1 Appealing to Audience Needs
On this expertly written and designed webpage, TD Ameritrade echoes the concerns that individual investors are likely to have when selecting a stockbroker. Notice how well the writing moves the reader from the highlevel message to six individual supporting points—each of which is a major audience needs—and then on to more detailed information. The clean, focused design is equally effective and works in close harmony with the text. The layout guides the reader’s eye from the upper left corner, downward to the six key support points, and then across to the right for additional layers of detail.
An endorsement from a well-known source boosts the credibility of the company’s promotional message.
Each of the six supporting points is presented at three levels of detail: (1) the short message of the button labels at the far left, (2) a short paragraph with a headline that echoes audience needs, and
(3) additional pages (accessed via the link) with full details.
Screenshot courtesy of TD Ameritrade IT Company, Inc. Copyright © 2012 by TD Ameritrade. Used with permission.
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Demographics include characteristics such as age, gender, occupation, income, and education.
Psychographics include characteristics such as personality, attitudes, and lifestyle.
To understand and categorize audience needs, you can refer to specific information, such as demographics (the age, gender, occupation, income, education, and other quantifiable characteristics of the people you’re trying to persuade) and psychographics (personality, attitudes, lifestyle, and other psychological characteristics). When analyzing your audiences, take into account their cultural expectations and practices so that you don’t undermine your persuasive message by using an inappropriate appeal or by organizing your message in a way that seems unfamiliar or uncomfortable to your readers.
If you aim to change someone’s attitudes, beliefs, or actions, it is vital to understand his or her motivation—the combination of forces that drive people to satisfy their needs. Table 9.1 lists some of the needs that psychologists have identified or suggested as being important in influencing human motivation. Obviously, the more closely a persuasive message aligns with a recipient’s existing motivation, the more effective the message is likely to be. For example, if you try to persuade consumers to purchase a product on the basis of its fashion appeal, that message will connect with consumers who are motivated by a desire to
TABLE 9.1 Human Needs That Influence Motivation
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Basic physiological requirements: The needs for food, water, sleep, oxygen, and other essentials
Everyone has these needs, but the degree of attention an individual gives to them often depends on whether the needs are being met; for instance, an advertisement for sleeping pills will have greater appeal to someone suffering from insomnia than to someone who has no problem sleeping.
Safety and security: The needs for protection from bodily |
These needs influence both consumer and business decisions in a wide variety |
harm, for the safety of loved ones, and for financial secu- |
of ways; for instance, advertisements for life insurance often encourage parents |
rity, protection of personal identity, career security, and |
to think about the financial security of their children and other loved ones. |
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Affiliation and belonging: The needs for companionship, |
The need to feel loved, accepted, or popular drives a great deal of human be- |
acceptance, love, popularity, and approval |
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Power and control: The need to feel in control of situa- |
You can see many examples appealing to this need in advertisements: Take |
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control of your life, your finances, your future, your career, and so on. Many |
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Achievement: The need to feel a sense of |
This need can involve both knowing (when people experience a feeling of |
accomplishment—or to be admired by others |
accomplishment) and showing (when people are able to show others that |
for accomplishments |
they’ve achieved success); advertising for luxury consumer products fre- |
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Adventure and distraction: The need for excitement or |
People vary widely in their need for adventure; some crave excitement—even |
relief from daily routine |
danger—whereas others value calmness and predictability. Some needs for |
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adventure and distraction are met virtually, such as through horror movies, |
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Knowledge, exploration, and understanding: The need to |
For some people, learning is usually a means to an end, a way to fulfill some |
keep learning |
other need; for others, acquiring new knowledge is the goal. |
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Aesthetic appreciation: The desire to experience beauty, |
Although this need may seem “noncommercial” at first glance, advertisers |
order, symmetry, etc. |
appeal to it frequently, from the pleasing shape of a package to the quality of |
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Self-actualization: The need to “be all that one can be,” to |
Psychologists Kurt Goldstein and Abraham Maslow popularized self- |
reach one’s full potential as a human being |
actualization as the desire to make the most of one’s potential, and Maslow |
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if people met most or all of their other needs, they would still feel the need |
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Helping others: The need to believe that one is making a difference in the lives of other people
This need is the central motivation in fundraising messages and other appeals to charity.
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be in fashion, but it probably won’t connect with consumers driven more by functional or financial concerns.
Gathering Information
Once your situation analysis is complete, you need to gather the information necessary to create a compelling persuasive message. You’ll learn more about the types of information to include in persuasive business messages and marketing and sales messages later in the chapter. Chapter 10 presents advice on how to find the information you need.
Selecting the Right Medium
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Organizing Your Information |
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Step 2: Writing Persuasive Messages
Encourage a positive response to your persuasive messages by (1) using positive and polite language, (2) understanding and respecting cultural differences, (3) being sensitive to organizational cultures, and (4) taking steps to establish your credibility.
Positive language usually happens naturally with persuasive messages because you’re promoting an idea or product you believe in. However, take care not to inadvertently insult your readers by implying that they’ve made poor choices in the past and that you’re here to save them from their misguided ways.
Be sure to understand cultural expectations as well. For example, a message that seems forthright and direct in a low-context culture might seem brash and intrusive in a highcontext culture.
Just as social culture affects the success of a persuasive message, so too does the culture within an organization. For instance, some organizations handle disagreement and conflict in an indirect, behind-the-scenes way, whereas others accept and even encourage open discussion and sharing of differing viewpoints.
Finally, if you are trying to persuade a skeptical or hostile audience, you must convince them you know what you’re talking about and that you’re not trying to mislead them. Use these techniques:
■Use simple language to avoid suspicions of fantastic claims and emotional manipulation.
■Provide objective evidence for the claims and promises you make.
■Identify your sources, especially if your audience already respects those sources.
■Establish common ground by emphasizing beliefs, attitudes, and background experiences you have in common with the audience.
Organizational culture can influence persuasion as much as social culture.
Audiences often respond unfavorably to over-the-top language,
so keep your writing simple and straightforward.