Example of First Draft Paragraph a Good Start

My first day of school was both good and bad. One of the good things was my teacher Mrs. Grant. She was very nice. Another good part of that day was when Mrs. Grant had us all be quiet and listen to the sound of the crayons while we were coloring. I was surprised that it was such a loud noise. The last good memory that I have of that day is finding the chocolate kiss in my bag. It made me remember that my mom loved me. There were bad things, too. The worst was that my mom was sick and couldn’t take me to school. I didn’t want to leave her alone, but my dad insisted that we go to school. One boy there kept pulling my hair. Then, my dad was late picking me up, and I cried. I’m glad I don’t have to relive that day. But the day wasn’t all bad,

Example of Revised Paragraph a Good Start

My first day of school was more good than bad. One of the good memories of that day was my teacher Mrs. Grant. She was very nice and seemed to understand why all the children were a little scared. Another good part of that day was when Mrs. Grant had us all be quiet and listen to the sound of the crayons while we were coloring. I was surprised that it was such a loud noise. The last good memory that I have of that day is finding the chocolate kiss in my lunch bag. It made me remember that my mom loved me. I also have a few memories of being frightened. My mom was sick and couldn’t take me to school. I didn’t want to leave her alone, but my dad insisted that we go to school. Also, my dad was late picking me up, and I cried. However, looking back, I was glad to be in my new adventure at school.

Example of a Paragraph Automated Customer Service

Today people have fewer human contacts as they go about their personal business. To buy gas, you can pull up alongside a gas pump, insert a credit card, and fill the tank without the help of an attendant. The charge is made automatically to your credit card. If you want to make a deposit or withdraw some money from the bank, you can step up to an automated teller machine to complete your business without talking to a teller. Moreover, to park in a public lot, you drive alongside a ticket dispenser machine, from which an automated voice explains what you should do. The gate then opens and allows the car in. When you leave, you insert the ticket in a machine, the gate opens, and you are on your way.

Essay Samples

Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer. Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? Use specific reasons to explain your choice.

Basically, people work for money and self-realization. However, some people prefer to be self-employed and others prefer to work for an employer. These two options are very different ones and I did not make my choice yet. I think that each of them has its own advantages and disadvantages.

Working as an employee brings many benefits. First of all, one can spend more time with his family helping his child do his homework, fishing with the whole family, etc. Second of all, one has fewer responsibilities. He just does his job and does not care about the market, competitors and expected profit. One taking a vocation can forget about all troubles, relax and not worry about who does his job during his absence. Finally, an employee can always find a more interesting job with a higher salary.

From the other side, be self-employed have many benefits too. First of all, one knows the more he works the more he gets. Another important reason of being self-employed is independence. One does not have to report to anyone except one's self. However, in addition to these practical benefits one gets more responsibilities to take care of.

To sum up, I think that be self-employed is not as easy as it may seem. A person must be self-confident, strong, and patient. He must know exactly what he wants and be ready to sacrifice all his spare time to it. I have a family and at this moment I am not sure that I am ready to sacrifice my time to the job.

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A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a center for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds of research centers do you recommend for your country? Use specific reasons in your recommendation.

In my country, Russia, I think that the question about whether to establish a new research center in business or in agriculture is a controversial one.

First of all, because I think that both these centers must work together and cooperate. For example, a business research center can collect information about what kind of cereal people prefer more and how much of it they consume every year. Then this information can be used by an agriculture research center, which in its turn will provide the company engaged in farming with essential information.

Second of all, it is rather difficult to decide which research center will bring more benefits to my country. From the one side, business research center can make very interesting and essential research for the economy of the country. It can gather information about the small business in the country, about consumer's preferences and what can be done to decrease the state debt. When I was in my third year in the university we (I and my classmates) make research regarding how many people use urban transportation every day and how much they spend on it monthly. I was really an amazing experience. We calculated numbers, learnt how to make conclusions and suggestions. From the other side, an agriculture research center can be very helpful in studying the conditions, under which the harvest of wheat or potato can be better or the quality of vegetables can be improved. The increased harvest of wheat will bring more money to the companies engaged in farming.

With regard to mention above, I think that if I would have to choose what research center will be more useful for my country it would be an agriculture research center. Because, nowadays I tend to think that good harvest is more important for people of my country than knowing how advertising influence the people's behavior.

Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people think that taking risks and chances will lead them to success. From my everyday experience and observation I believe that success results from careful planning. I base my position on the following points.

First of all, I believe that careful planning help a person to analyze his goal more deeply and make realistic goals. He knows exactly what he wants. Taking chances, from the other hand, does not give the opportunity to clearly understand a goal. A person just wants to do something to move forward and he takes risk when there is no need in it.

Second of all, careful planning teaches people to arrange their time more carefully in order to reach their goals. They become more patient and calm. They plan every step. This allows people to find easier way to reach their goals and faster move forward. From the other hand, people who prefer to take risks without planning may spend more time without any improvements waiting for a chance to take. Take sportsmen for example. They exercise a lot before their performance to be in shape, do all their best and improve their previous results.

Finally, careful planning teaches them not to give up, try to find other ways to reach their goals in the case of failure.

To sum up, personally, I think that all people who succeeded in life would agree with me that their success came with the hard work and careful planning.